tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32838402.post3540595695108480729..comments2024-03-24T20:34:23.967-06:00Comments on Family and Friends blog: The DirectorateP M Prescotthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12973205373056561583noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32838402.post-13325900242198218902018-01-25T18:07:58.734-07:002018-01-25T18:07:58.734-07:00Glad to be of help. You're well on your way to...Glad to be of help. You're well on your way to be a top notch writer. I think this genre is better than your horror. I know that is your favorite style of writing, but sometimes what you enjoy reading is not what you're good at writing.P M Prescotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12973205373056561583noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32838402.post-53058076777677290952018-01-25T17:06:20.004-07:002018-01-25T17:06:20.004-07:00Thanks so much for the review and the comments! So...Thanks so much for the review and the comments! So glad that you liked it.<br /><br />Regarding point 1: in my first draft, there actually was a much stronger undercurrent of romantic interest between Gannon and the Colonel. I never switched to his POV, but I did have him say some things that hinted at it, and had her pick up on it. And it became a lot more obvious in the second half of the book. I agree this makes it much stronger.<br /><br />So why did I ultimately cut it, then? Well, basically, I could just never get it to "feel" right, if that makes any sense. I don't doubt a better writer could do it, but writing romance is really a weak point for me, and try as I might, I could not make it work. So I ultimately abandoned it. But you're right, it would work better that way.<br /><br />Regarding your other comments: all good suggestions, and I'll definitely incorporate them into a revision and/or sequel. <br /><br />Thanks again! I'm really excited that you enjoyed it. Berthold Gambrelnoreply@blogger.com